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Not native, but the "past couple of years" thing requires "for" and the definite article.
Last sentence: that shouldn't be a comma, but a full stop. Avoid runaway sentences, and add the "am" that present continuous requires.
Also, "I love to make" sounds off in this context because it's not the choice or possibility that you like, but the action itself that you enjoy.
Being a web developer and then doing web development sounds like a truism. I'd also put the "currently" at the beginning of the last sentence so that you don't have three consecutive sentences starting with "I".
"I've been working as self-taught web developer for the past couple of years. I love making cool stuff for myself and other people and am always open to learning new things. Currently, I'm pursuing my bachelor's degree." -
Tag lines are irrelevant today. But if you actually love to make cool stuff, you might have something to list and link - like a Github profile or stuff you created or contributed to.
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[Reply part 1]
Alright.. Business Skills English college revisited..
First things first, I'll give my grammatical review first:
- "I'm a self-taught web developer"; use of active form ("I'm"), good.
- "past couple of years"; forgot to put the "in the"
- "and I've"; repetition if the "I" actor, could be improved.
- "web developer", "I've been doing web development"; this is kind of saying the same thing twice
- "I love" again "I", repepition, could be improved.
- "stuff"; non-business language makes you seem like an amateur; does not fit and it's also vague.
- "for myself and other people"; may be too much context, even though "other people" could be accentuated
- "and am"; incorrect omission of the actor "I"
- "things"; vague, unprofessional
- "I currently"; Hm, I'm not sure if this is a typo because it's obvious it's not correct. -
[Reply part 2]
Let's see..
First draft:
"As a self-taught web-developer in the past couple of years I've been enjoying bringing new and interesting user-tailored software solutions to life. I'm currently pursuing my bachelor's degree and I'm always open to learn new technologies."
Second draft:
"As a self-taught web-developer I've been enjoying bringing new and interesting user-tailored software solutions to life in the past couple of years. I'm currently pursuing my bachelor's degree and I'm always open to learn new technologies."
reason for edit: focus on what you've been doing (the action), "in the past couple of years" is of secondary importance. In English, it's always best to keep the subject close to the action that's modifying it.
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